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The early rays of sun
Pierce his room
He moves his head
Trying to capture some darkness

He moves around his bed
Forcing his eyes to remain closed
He finally gives up
Turns around his bed
Staring at the ceiling
He gets up scratching his beard
Rubs his forehead

He goes into his bathroom
Takes a quick shower
Brushes his teeth
Decides not to shave
He stares at himself in the mirror
Rubs his hair “not bad”</i> he says to himself

Reaches for the first thing in his closet
A pair of jeans and his favorite sweatshirt
He grabs his back pack and searches for his mobile
He finds it and smiles…reads a message
From his love…he walks out

He meets up with random friends
Random conversations
Random work
Mobile rings…he answers…he smiles
She whispers “I love you”</i>
He says “good bye”…</i>hangs up

Night falls…he smiles
Another day is over…simply over…
He calls her…they meet up
Tangle over random subjects…
They kiss…they hug…
She whispers “I love you”</i>
He kisses her

She laughs…lights a cigg
He smiles nervously…
She stares at him…as always…
He knew they were going to have…
The same conversation…
He took a deep breath…
Waiting to hear…the same words…

She says “Will you ever fall in love with me?”</i>
He smiles nervously “I don’t know”</i>
She laughs “will you ever know?”</i>
He laughs “I don’t know”</i>

She hugs him…he feels relieved…
She kisses him…he kisses her back…
He feels safe…
The conversation is finally over…
They would have the same conversation…
Every time they met…

She would ask the same questions…
He would give her the same answers…
He would always worry…that she would get fed up…
Simply leave him…he had dragged her into his chaos…
Yet she would never leave…he felt lucky…he felt content…

They would depart…in hours to come…hoping to meet soon…
He was wrong…at least tonight…she stopped kissing him…
She stared into his eyes…she had tears in her own…
She says “One day…I’ll leave…run away…and eventually disappear…
         Will you join me love? Will you…”
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He just stood there…staring at her…listening to her words…
She cried silently…hugged him…then walked away…
He stood there…watching her walk away…wishing he could scream…
Forcing her to stop…to hug her…to hold her in his arms…
He just stood there…silently…watching…feeling…feeling…numb…
Since I always write about "Her"
I decided to write about "Him" this time ;)

Inspired by the concept of Love...the word that can change our life in one second...either making it simply better...or actually breaking us apart...

Enjoy :blowkiss:
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wildefaerie Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008
As i was reading it i went through a 'feeling' i usually and most of the time have when a certain song plays... It's a feeling of Grandeur d'Ame, with a touch of Peace and Purity...

The song is called, There is no if... by The Cure
(album Bloodflowers):

'remember the first time i told you i love you -
it was raining hard and you never heard -
you sneezed! and i had to say it over
"i said i love you" i said... you didn't say a word
just held you hands to my shining eyes
and i watched as the rain ran through your fingers
held your hands to my shining eyes and smiled as you kissed me...

"if you die" you said "so do i" you said...
and it starts the day you make the sign
"tell me i'm forever yours and you're forever mine
forever mine..."

"if you die" you said "so do i" you said...
and it starts the day you cross that line
"swear i will always be yours and you'll always be mine
you'll ways be mine
always be mine..."

remember the last time i told you i love you -
it was warm and safe in our perfect world -
you yawned and i had to say it over
"i said i love you" i said... you didn't say a word
just held your hands to your shining eyes
and i watched as the tears ran through your fingers
held your hands to your shining eyes and cried...

"if you die" you said "so do i" you said...
but it ends the day you see how it is
there is no always forever... just this...
just this...

"if you die" you said "so do i" you said
but it ends the day you understand
there is no if... just and

there is no if... just and

there is no if... '

Her as between the lines of this song, glows an expression of Grandeur d'Ame, of 'feeling' that not everybody discovered in themselves yet. Disregarding the 'him' and 'she', and the characters in-between... The words resound wealthily.

I also couldn't help but notice the 'crushing' sounds as i read on (s, f, b, d, sh, th...). If made on purpose Lynelle you are really good at it, if not made on purpose then i think we got another proof to the definition of the word 'genius'.

Thank you :)
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Lynnelle Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008
btw I love this song :hug:

as for the feelings you finally gave me a word or sentence to define them with :)

As for the crushing sounds, I read it out loud and listened to them, hehe I guess subconsciously there's something there after all

So thank YOU for the amazing words :blush: :hug:

:blowkiss:
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corpsebride00 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2008
i like it sooo much...
i dnt hv time to read/see the deviations... they eventually pilled up and i was like 5ALAS BA2A!

ANYHOW!

lina... this is sooo nice...
seriously.. and its so true...

ino she doesn't even know whats holding her back. why cnt she find it in herself to leave?
what is she lacking?
what is he gving her to stay? NOTHING!
he is gving her nuthing and yet she doesn't hv the guts to pick up and leave :(
and yet she loves him...

love can be the best thing ever, or the hardest most painful thing you can ever go through.

guess she isnt the one for him...
and he isnt hers either...
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wildefaerie Featured By Owner Sep 24, 2008
Love never hurts ... If it hurts, then it must be 'something' else... but not Love.

*shy face* i had to say this.
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corpsebride00 Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2008
:nod: true!
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Lynnelle Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2008
I'm so happy you liked it!!!!

Love is a pain in the ass ;) but it's still beautiful even if it makes you a coward sometimes :blowkiss:

That's what I love about my characters their lives are different and messed up yet they make sense and give meaning to our chaos ;)

:hug:
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Rachting Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2008
This piece is wonderful. It seems like he is just happy to take what she offers and not offer anything back. It's sad the people who won't give back, they are ones destined to be alone. Really if they can't see that, if they think they can just take people for granted, then they deserve to be alone until they are capable of giving something.
Brilliant piece of writing - you made me feel.
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Lynnelle Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2008
Yes they are selfish and end up being alone...it's really sad :(

Thank you for the fav :hug: so glad you liked it :blowkiss:
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conundrum66 Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2007
:hug: speechless.
a favourite!! I just love it.
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Lynnelle Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2007
Habiby!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! thank you so much!!!

so happy you liked it :blowkiss:

Thanx for the fav :glomp: :smooch:
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